Year 3/4 CA this week have been learning about tension and suspense to describe feelings and emotions - show not tell....

Examples of their stupendous writing and comprehension skills 

Wolf Pack by Alannah Miles

Bang! goes the hunter's rifle's "Run" screams midnight leader of our wolf pack. 

Okay, so let me fill you in, My name is Star, I'm part of night clan wolf pack, we travel the land and have never come across hunters until today. We were travelling peacefully then we came across a camp full of hunter then they started to attach us....

The Abandoned Mansion by Caitlin Walsh

Boom? Goes the thunder 'we need shelter' I say loudly over the loud booms of the thunderstorm 'there' says Drake pointing to a rusty, dilapidated mansion.  it wasn't clear at first but once I got use to the rain I saw a mansion that had creaking windows and doors and the window sills were dusty, the whole house was dusty.

We ran up the stairs and into the house.  When we get in I see shadows dancing on the ceiling and walls.  These shadows were lit by the moonlight then I see the walls and everything.  then it hits me like a bullet shot from a gun. This thing was a place for something before, something important....

then the thunder strikes again, this time louder BOOM! It strikes a tree next to the mansion.  The tree, engulfed in flames lit the mansion with a stunning light, then I noticed a hunched figure at the top of the stairs.... "hey" Amy whispered 'who is that?" she points to the figure. "I don't know," I whisper back. BOOM!! The lightning again.  It lit the house this time. Soon the light faded engulfing the mansion in total darkness, the figure was gone.. 

Floppy Fun Time by Andrew Doszpot

Empty rows of the shut supermarket.  I finally got to the toy section when I hear a cackling voice.

"Hello Timmy" it said.

"How do you know my name!!" I reply.

"I know everything!"

an exciting ending by Thomas Doyle

Hmm? what is that sound I wonder! I feel something tickling my senses I feel as I can cry many tears, but at the same time burst with happiness. I look back and scream....