Year 3/4 P this week have been learning about tension and suspense to describe feelings and emotions - show not tell....

Examples of their stupendous writing and comprehension skills 

CHOCOLATE HOMES By Shelby Wilson  

Chocolate homes for sale, chocolate homes for sale. Me please me. Just amagine having a chocolate house.  Sold sold for $100,00.00 - Sold, I repeat sold.  OMGoodness I won, I have a chocolate house.

Uhh Tom yawned, you and I can't wait to move into my chocolate house...

CREEEEKKKK, the golden Easter egg door opened.

Tom started breathing heavily. Huhuh huhuh huhuh mice and rats running everywhere - a cage with a  uh uh a dead bird, HELP!!!

This isn't the sweet chocolate house that I dreamed for.

Ha Ha Ha !! I got you, I knew it was you! I knew it. Please someone help me. Tom started crying, he was terrafired, his hairs were standing up, he didn't know what to do....

This is when drip drip drip....

What is that?  Tom threw a stick at a tree, he slowly walked inside it was dripping blood.

Ahhh please help me........

Will was lost, terrified, hopelessly stumbling around tears streaming down his eyes.

Will was angry, chopping the spider webs in the rusty old iron shed. Will stumbled and fell to the ground - then the lights went out.

Will screamed, Will was desperate to get out searching the walls for an opening, up ahead he saw

blood. 

Will took all his courage and went in cautiously stepping like he was about to trip. At the end of the hallway was another door.  Will ran towards it as if a family member came home.  He smashed open the door only to find he was back at the start.

Just then he heard a voice, he turned around with his fists to his chest ready for attack, but all he saw was a shadow turning to the hallway.  Will ran after him, but he could not see him.  Suddenly the floor beneath him disappeared and he was falling fast.  His feet smashed into the ground - then blackness.!!